What would you rate this poem?

Ahem... you have very good vocabulary and you seem to know a lot of large words, yes? Well I think you use a little bit too many in here, so that other people won't quite understand it. Its different than anything I've read before... because of all the words.. it seems sort of cluttered and too close together, you need to space it out more. Um... I think I would rate it about a 4 or 5.. It definitely has potential though.